My poem

[BAZ]

i wrote this for a girl cuz i was being an asshole to her.. can yall rate it 1-10 plz..... this is the first poem i ever wrote in my life

when u entered my life
things felt so right
whenever i had a frown
u would turn it upside down

i dont know what i would do without u
the thought just makes me cry about u
u are what makes me happy
even when im feeling crappy

i wanna be the one to complete ur life
ill do anything to make u my wife
when every thing is bad
u make me the opposite of sad

today i went crazy
just cuz i luved u so much baby
im gonna show u i luv u
no bullshit, ill put no one above u

 

[Venice_native]

Stop while you're behind.

I can't even try to read it. Try to not make every word spelled wrong and make it flow grammatically, and then maybe.

 

[BAZ]

yea i figured it sucked i been failing english since like 6th grade

 

[Venice_native]

It's not that it's bad, it's just grammatically and spelling wise it needs revision.

 

[Epidemic]

sounds like rnb =/