What is the World in a Grain of Sand

[Gemini_Bloodian]

This is a poem I posted on a different forum in a contest. The theme was this:What is the World in a Grain of Sand?

Well, I liked this, so I thought I'd see what you all thought.

What is the World in a Grain of Sand?
A reverb in the wind?
A ripple of the ocean?
Or is it something... more?

Our hands held high,
Reaching for our destiny.
Grasping for the truth,
We look towards the past, as we head for the future.

As we come to understand life more and more, something is always gained, and something is always lost.
Memories,
Precious memories,
A fragment of the memory lost in the gap between life and death.

A voice is sung from the heart,
Human emotion.
When heard,
The voice becomes a lullaby.

Our voices speak,
But never change.
The tune will always be the same,
A silient requiem.

Yet, when is it our turn for a quite repose?
Who will sing us our song?
Who will sing us,
The prelude to eternity

 

[ORC-r0x0r-ROC]

Wow..... that is really good! 9.5/10. Did you win?

I can't really rate is logically but you end it nice with "The prelude to eternity"

 

[Master.America]

I've seen that topic somewhere else before, but I can't remember exactly where. I don't think I saw it online, though.

Good poem. I don't know exactly how to rate it, however, because I'm caught between the high quality of the poem and the fact that I just don't understand what it has to do with "the world in a grain of sand." The question at the end of the poem changes and doesn't seem to have any relevance to its original intention.

 

[Gemini_Bloodian]

Well, the topic is more of a question of interpetation.

Gemini_Bloodian

 

[Orcryst]

Originality is what I crave when I read peoms. Rating them would be like relating poems to math, or evaluating them... My opinion of the poem is not important. The point is that I appreciate everything I read, because even though something may not be completely original, it is still different from the last and next.

 

[Kuzmich]

Not a bad poem, although i don't understand what you mean.