Touch

Tempest Storm

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Touch

What is this sensation taking me over
slaying my sanity, my humanity
this beast within, clawing his way out

The beast, craving what it can't have
the carnal desires that feed him
only seem to make him hungrier

My senses, so dulled
is this pain, or pleasure
sad that it all feels the same

Your voice, echoing in my ear,
but your body, so far away
My mind, so tired of imagining

Where are you?
no one here, no one to help, only me
the release, bittersweet, but is there no other?

New dawn

This gift from above
flooding me with its beauty
it's death, dawning a new life

Hearing the wind blow though the trees
ruffling the leaves, stirring the grass
cooling this warmth inside

Trying to smell the cool night
as the smoke penetrates my lungs
clouding my senses

I can touch the air
feel it run though my fingers
Like the infinite sands of the beach

Like a fine wine, I taste the rain
taste the sweat
taste this life

Discover the wonder
behold it in my eyes
just like you

Purging the pain
and pacifying my mind
I've found my nirvana
 

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very enjoying poems. they are nice to read. ill share some of mine soon.
 

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On the topic of your first poem.. I have read it thoroughly, but what is the "sensation?" The one that is "slaying my sanity, my humanity." Is it depression? =/

Kind of a rackety transition.. you were talking about a certain feeling represented by a beast, then you start talking about someone who is far away..

No offense, but it seems that your going out of your way to make your poetry pessimistic. Its kind of pointless, and your sad statements dont do anything for me.
 
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