Some of my work

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Now, these are stories, but it said "Unleash your imagination and creative writing skills in the Fan-Fiction forum"...so I think I'll post some of my poems. I don't like them, but I want to know what people other then my friends think of them.

The One

Up until that wonderful day
That I realized that I loved you
I never felt strongly about
Anything or anyone at all.

You’ve shown me that
I matter
I’m alive
To put it simply, I exist

The only thing I hope
Is that this isn’t just
Some “High school crush.
But if it is, and this ends
Just remember,
I’m always here for you
And that I’ll always love you

You are beautiful,
The single most beautiful thing
That I’ve ever seen
To me, there is nothing else

I know I’ve found my “oneâ€


My Treasures


Each and every one of us
Holds a piece of another.
There are three,
That hold a piece of me.

There is ___(insert guy name here).
He holds the biggest piece
We’ve been through a lot,
Had many troubles,
But we made it through.
He’ll always be my best friend.

Next, there is ___(insert girls name here).
She always knows just what to say
To make me smile,
And shun the bad times away.
11 months isn’t that long
But she’s tied for second
In my friend’s list.

Third, though second on my list, is my love, ___(insert girls name here)
We may have nothing in common
But we are closer than atoms.
She is the only one that I truly care about,
The one I dream about.
We will make it though.

Each of them are important to me,
In totally different ways,
I love each of them more
Than my life.
They are,
My Treasures.


My Light, My Hope, My Love

My light, my hope, my love
When ever I see you
My eyes light with joy
When ever I think of you
My lips form my rarest smile
When ever I am with you
Everything seems better

My light, my hope, my love
My Light:
You show me that I exist in this world
My Hope:
You show me that even someone like me can find Love
My Love:
Every thought, smile, action is from you

My light, my hope, my love
Megan, my dearest
I love you with all my heart
If the world stopped now
I would be forever happy that I knew you
Megan, my love
I wish to be with you forever

My light, my hope, my love
When you tell me good things about myself
I won't ever believe them
But take my word
Everything I ever said about you is true
Your beauty is more beautiful than the starts
Your voice, more magical then wind chimes
And your smile warms my heart more then any fire could

You are:
My Light
My Hope
My Love.


Hatred

There aren’t too many things
That I say “hate†for.
But you go through your life
“Hating†at least one person.

Hate, by definition, is the
Opposite of “loveâ€,
No offence Webster,
But that definition sucks.

You may have a person
Because they lie
They are cruel
They don’t even try to act nice.

That person comes alone
And you wish them dead
Always a horrible one,
I never did that.

Because the one I hate…

Is me.


Choices

When you are away,
When I don’t see you
For more than a day
It feels as if part of my
Soul has been lost.

You hold my heart in your hand
And every other piece as well
Physical
Mental
Emotional
Spiritual

Each of these is what
I give you willingly
And lovingly
You have two choices
You can either
Embrace my gift, or
You can crush my heart, my soul.

I love everything about you
And nothing you can do
Will ever change that.
The choice is yours, and yours alone.
Either way, I shall always
Be yours.

Will you deicide?
 

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Really?...^.^ It's nice that someone, besides the people that they were ment for, likes them.
 

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I don't have a review format for poems, so i will give you an overall written rateing.

Overall 9/10
 

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I write them during my photo class, I don't try to sit there and think about them. I just write what pops into mind.
 
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