Some of my work

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  1. Omega_Weapon_

    Omega_Weapon_ Member!

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    Now, these are stories, but it said "Unleash your imagination and creative writing skills in the Fan-Fiction forum"...so I think I'll post some of my poems. I don't like them, but I want to know what people other then my friends think of them.

    The One

    Up until that wonderful day
    That I realized that I loved you
    I never felt strongly about
    Anything or anyone at all.

    You’ve shown me that
    I matter
    I’m alive
    To put it simply, I exist

    The only thing I hope
    Is that this isn’t just
    Some “High school crush.
    But if it is, and this ends
    Just remember,
    I’m always here for you
    And that I’ll always love you

    You are beautiful,
    The single most beautiful thing
    That I’ve ever seen
    To me, there is nothing else

    I know I’ve found my “oneâ€


    My Treasures


    Each and every one of us
    Holds a piece of another.
    There are three,
    That hold a piece of me.

    There is ___(insert guy name here).
    He holds the biggest piece
    We’ve been through a lot,
    Had many troubles,
    But we made it through.
    He’ll always be my best friend.

    Next, there is ___(insert girls name here).
    She always knows just what to say
    To make me smile,
    And shun the bad times away.
    11 months isn’t that long
    But she’s tied for second
    In my friend’s list.

    Third, though second on my list, is my love, ___(insert girls name here)
    We may have nothing in common
    But we are closer than atoms.
    She is the only one that I truly care about,
    The one I dream about.
    We will make it though.

    Each of them are important to me,
    In totally different ways,
    I love each of them more
    Than my life.
    They are,
    My Treasures.


    My Light, My Hope, My Love

    My light, my hope, my love
    When ever I see you
    My eyes light with joy
    When ever I think of you
    My lips form my rarest smile
    When ever I am with you
    Everything seems better

    My light, my hope, my love
    My Light:
    You show me that I exist in this world
    My Hope:
    You show me that even someone like me can find Love
    My Love:
    Every thought, smile, action is from you

    My light, my hope, my love
    Megan, my dearest
    I love you with all my heart
    If the world stopped now
    I would be forever happy that I knew you
    Megan, my love
    I wish to be with you forever

    My light, my hope, my love
    When you tell me good things about myself
    I won't ever believe them
    But take my word
    Everything I ever said about you is true
    Your beauty is more beautiful than the starts
    Your voice, more magical then wind chimes
    And your smile warms my heart more then any fire could

    You are:
    My Light
    My Hope
    My Love.


    Hatred

    There aren’t too many things
    That I say “hate†for.
    But you go through your life
    “Hating†at least one person.

    Hate, by definition, is the
    Opposite of “loveâ€,
    No offence Webster,
    But that definition sucks.

    You may have a person
    Because they lie
    They are cruel
    They don’t even try to act nice.

    That person comes alone
    And you wish them dead
    Always a horrible one,
    I never did that.

    Because the one I hate…

    Is me.


    Choices

    When you are away,
    When I don’t see you
    For more than a day
    It feels as if part of my
    Soul has been lost.

    You hold my heart in your hand
    And every other piece as well
    Physical
    Mental
    Emotional
    Spiritual

    Each of these is what
    I give you willingly
    And lovingly
    You have two choices
    You can either
    Embrace my gift, or
    You can crush my heart, my soul.

    I love everything about you
    And nothing you can do
    Will ever change that.
    The choice is yours, and yours alone.
    Either way, I shall always
    Be yours.

    Will you deicide?
     
  2. Ninjastar29

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    Wow, these are some great poems.
     
  3. Omega_Weapon_

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    Really?...^.^ It's nice that someone, besides the people that they were ment for, likes them.
     
  4. Emperor Pan I

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    I don't have a review format for poems, so i will give you an overall written rateing.

    Overall 9/10
     
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    x42bn6 Retired Staff

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    Nice work. But there isn't enough 'emotion' hard enough inside it.
     
  6. YeoKeh

    YeoKeh Battleforums OG

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    Good work do you studie or do u pull them from scratch?
     
  7. Omega_Weapon_

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    I write them during my photo class, I don't try to sit there and think about them. I just write what pops into mind.