My "story"

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  1. hunter_killer

    hunter_killer BattleForums Senior Member

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    This is a true story that I made last week, I haven't finsihed, but I'll show you guys when I'm done.

    My 8th grade...

    There I was, it was Summer 2002, in my house, the lazy bum that I was, (and still am) It was July 2002, when the creation of Battle Forums was
    upon us. Of course, I have never heard of it until January.. Anyway, it was
    the start of 8th grade, and I couldn’t be lazy anymore. Was I so wrong..

    When I first stepped into school, I felt I had no friends, everyone were just
    strangers. Then, my friends showed up, and we just hanged.

    Now, back in the beginning of the year, I was a nervous, shy, little kid.
    I kinda still am, but I have gotten braver (And taller too)

    The second week of 8th grade was a little better foe me, I had some new
    friends, my old friends were there, the tesachers weren’t bad. BUt there was
    only one thing that really stood out. This girl. Her looks are what brought me
    in, but her obnoxious behavior made me stay. I
    thought it was just a simple crush (Was I so wrong...) I honestly thought it
    would go away, but it didn’t.

    Fall 2002. Fall break was upon us. Fall break was one of the greatest
    time periods in my life. It was my birthday, I had been introduced with all
    kinds of rock music, I had first bought StarCraft, I stayed up till 4 reading my
    favorite book. Oh ya, hell, I even stopped liking the girl during fall break. I
    had first listened to “She Hates Me†by Puddle of Mudd.. The lyrics made me
    realize.. Here are some of the lyrics: “Met a girl, thought she was grand, fell in
    love, found out first hand, went well for a week or 2, then it all, came
    unglued.†“She was queen for about an hour, after that, she got sour, she took
    all I ever had, no sign of guilt, no feeling bad†Then, back to school...

    Second quarter of 8th grade, 2002. Well, here I am, back in school. I felt that
    my feelings for this girl had diminshed. I started spiking up my hair, and tried
    to act “coolâ€. When I saw her again.. Erm, I liked her again, HA. I thought
    that my feelings for her diminished. Was I soooooooooooooooo Wrong.. Heh, I
    actually thought she’d dig me with my “shpiked†up hair. I was so wrong, yet
    again. She didn’t really pay any attention to me.

    I got my Relient K CD in the mail. I had bought it from Ebay. I liked
    all the songs on the CD, and listened to it 24-7. I liked the songs “Pressing Onâ€
    “Sadie Hawkins Dance†“Down In Flames†“Breakdown†and “Lion-oâ€

    Back to my school life. It was nearly winter break. I felt I had to do
    something. People told me to write her a note. I did, but the night before I
    planned to give it to her, I was so freakin nervous. My friend told me not to be
    nervous. The next day, I gave it to her. Holy shitballs, was I nervous once I
    gave it to her. I tried avoiding her afterI gave it to her.

    WINTER BREAK: WOO-HOO!!
    It was Christmas.. My relatives came over. I got some presents and cash, played
    some SC.. I was such a no0b back then.. Err, using cheats *blech* I looked for
    some strats over the net.

    I found BlizzForums at the New Years. I found some great strats on BLizz, but
    the peeps seemed really mean. So, I looked for new forums. I searched “starcraft
    forums†on Yahoo, and I found starcraftforums.com, sub-division of
    BattleForums.

    That's all I really have so far.
     
  2. not bad... i like it. Write more please.
     
  3. Emperor Pan I

    Emperor Pan I Respected Member

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    Story 8/10
    originality 9/10
    style 7/10
    structured 7/10
    Spelling/Grammer 8/10

    Reviewers Comments:
    Good story, obviously, it is based on your life, so the story doesn't realy matter. It would be nice to give more details. It is obviously original, as original as your life can be, im sure no one is going to put their life story. It is written well, nicely put in paragraphs. the general idea is easy to follow.
    Spelling was good, grammer was a little better.
    overall good job.
     
  4. D.F.I.

    D.F.I. Member!

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    pretty good..........similar to my life in many ways.......
     
  5. ehjay

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    you have less than 30 posts on blizzforums, and only posted in like two threads.. and of those threads i see no reasoning beyond your thinking.

    just curious as to why you'd say such.
     
  6. daoffshoreman

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    just depressing......
     
  7. NinjaStrike

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    thats a pretty good story [​IMG]
     
  8. TheNamelessYam

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    the first decent thing hunter has produced!!!!!!!
    9/10