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Hot Action Cop
Needs more passion in it.... its feeling dry like... he doesnt seem to care about those 70 people. Its like... Hi. I killed. Someone. Today. Oh. No. Its. Gonna rain.
Story: 7 Comments: seems like a good idea just needs more developing
Creativity: 6. Comments: Could use a little revamping on some of it
Grammer: 9 i find few and far. good job
Passion: 2.5 Comments; WAY tooo dry!
overall: 5.5
Story: 7 Comments: seems like a good idea just needs more developing
Creativity: 6. Comments: Could use a little revamping on some of it
Grammer: 9 i find few and far. good job
Passion: 2.5 Comments; WAY tooo dry!
overall: 5.5