adding my 2 cents

[shortys_girl]

Since there are many threads about stories, I'm going to change tactics and talk about poems.Heres mine I wrote a couple of years ago called Beach Remembrance :

Standing silently and serenely
On the edge of the beach,
I faintly hear the whisper
Of the waves, calling out like
A mother's sweet voice to me.
As I gaze towards the pier
I strain to hear
The caw, caw, cawing of sea gulls
All in a craze, imitating children
At play.
The majestic, magnificent
Rolling waves.
The thunderous crashing
Of the enormous, glistening waves
Reminds me that I am
But a mere mortal child.

[TheNamelessYam]

pamma, this is one of your great works of spam, now shut up

well, I thought it was an awesome poem though, good job

[YeoKeh]

Wow *sniff* *sniff* touching almost made me cry lolz... i almost did.

[bamthedoc]

shortys_girl

Nice job. It's a good poem, but I'm lacking in how to rate poems. So I'll put it this way:

Overall: 8/10

I liked it, but I took off simply because it somewhat lacked originality. Plus, I don't know all the criteria, so, if someone would enlighten me, I might edit that score by virtue of further analysis.

[a1steaksauce]

i think it is a good poem,do u live near the ocean?