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06-02-2003, 04:39 AM
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Join Date: May 2003 Location: with my katana Posts: 83
| My working Starcraft project
Here you go. This isnt very long so far, but i think its shaping up pretty well.
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06-02-2003, 04:41 AM
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| Oops
Oops left out the actual thing.. | |
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06-02-2003, 04:46 AM
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Join Date: Aug 2002 Location: Washington Posts: 2,776
| Wow, very good! Do you plan on extending and writing more? Im really looking forward to it, 9/10, the firebats need to say more than they just say in the game and the "12 died" confused me. 12 marines/firebats or 12 zerglings? were there 40 zerglings or 40 marines? Otherwise, I like it! | |
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06-02-2003, 05:01 AM
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| Starcraft Warzone
This is an older story, but longer than Project Voodoo thus far. This story follows a war-scarred Dominion Marine who starts a vendetta against Emperor Mengsk. | |
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06-02-2003, 05:05 AM
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| New Version
Edited, if you will, read on... | |
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06-02-2003, 09:07 AM
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| | | nice job
i give it 8.8/10. I liked it. I would have to agree with l337ie though. Need to clarify some stuff. And some of the names arent too original, like some very similar to magic the gathering names, some from brood war, ect. Good though | |
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06-03-2003, 12:31 AM
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| Starcraft Project Voodoo
I have added more to it now. | |
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06-03-2003, 01:11 AM
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Join Date: Aug 2002 Location: Canada Age: 20 Posts: 11,806
| First Story
Story 8/10
originality 9/10
style 6/10
structured 4/10
Spelling/Grammer 7/10
Overall 7.5/10
Reviewers Comments
Great story. It was what you might call original, it was written fairly well, except at the end where everything seemed to happen in one paragraph where you weren't sure who was
Second story
Story 8/10
originality 9/10
style 7.5/10
structured 7/10
Spelling/Grammer 6/10
Overall 8.5/10
Reviewers Comments
I liked this. not to much wrong with it. | |
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06-03-2003, 08:31 PM
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| Note- Both are far from done. And please explain why you scored it the way you did!
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06-04-2003, 01:06 AM
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| i didnt really like it that much, 5.8 out of 10
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06-29-2003, 08:25 PM
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| ZERGLINGS RULE FOREVER!!!!!!!
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06-29-2003, 09:29 PM
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| King Endymion
Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: North Carolina, USA Age: 25 Posts: 4,288
| scpv.txt
Story: 8/10
Originality: 7/10
Style: 5/10
Structured: 5/10
Spelling/Grammer: 8/10
Overall: 7
The story was nice. It was well driven, and the originality certainly helped. The style and structure could be worked on. There were a few spelling and grammer mistakes that I notices. Overall, well done.
scvw.txt
Story: 7/10
Originality: 8/10
Style: 7/10
Structured: 7/10
Spelling/Grammer: 8/10
Overall: 7.5
The story was good. Well driven and original. The style and structure were well selected, but could use some work. There were still spelling and grammer mistakes, but that can always be expected. Overall, nice job. It seemed to be better on track than the "newer" one.
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