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The Ebony Eye, a preview~

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Literature Haven A place to show off your imagination and creativity skills. Here you can find the Roleplayer's Realm, our newest addition, Dungeons & Dragons, as well as our Writer's Council Forum.

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Old 06-01-2003, 10:28 PM   #1 (permalink)
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The Ebony Eye, a preview~
He burst through the clad iron gate, striding through the shadows like darkness itself, this was his realm- Nal'Shinnen had buisness, and buisness he meant to finish quickly. Coming out of the alley, and into the bustling streets of Calimport, he scanned the area quickly for any spies in the immediate vicinity. Sensing none, he quickly opened the secret door, and descended into the darknes....






So, what do you think of the prelude? It think its good so far.
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Old 06-01-2003, 10:58 PM   #2 (permalink)
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not bad... i found a few grammatical errors though.
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I'll bet, well this isnt copy/paste, as I am writing this on a diff comp.
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There's not enough to review. Although, from this base, it has a lot of potential... lol... just about any base does...
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Old 09-04-2003, 06:01 PM   #5 (permalink)
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to short to review as as unknown_being said, so keep going its not bad
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