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BAZ · 04-09-2006, 02:47 PM

i wrote this for a girl cuz i was being an ******* to her.. can yall rate it 1-10 plz..... this is the first poem i ever wrote in my life

when u entered my life
things felt so right
whenever i had a frown
u would turn it upside down

i dont know what i would do without u
the thought just makes me cry about u
u are what makes me happy
even when im feeling crappy

i wanna be the one to complete ur life
ill do anything to make u my wife
when every thing is bad
u make me the opposite of sad

today i went crazy
just cuz i luved u so much baby
im gonna show u i luv u
no bull****, ill put no one above u

~~Venice_native~~ · 04-09-2006, 04:00 PM

Stop while you're behind.

I can't even try to read it. Try to not make every word spelled wrong and make it flow grammatically, and then maybe.

BAZ · 04-09-2006, 04:06 PM

yea i figured it sucked i been failing english since like 6th grade

~~Venice_native~~ · 04-09-2006, 04:14 PM

It's not that it's bad, it's just grammatically and spelling wise it needs revision.

Epidemic · 11-21-2006, 12:27 AM

sounds like rnb =/

04-09-2006, 02:47 PM	#1 (permalink)
BAZ cash Join Date: Jun 2005 Posts: 108	my poem i wrote this for a girl cuz i was being an ***** to her.. can yall rate it 1-10 plz..... this is the first poem i ever wrote in my life when u entered my life things felt so right whenever i had a frown u would turn it upside down i dont know what i would do without u the thought just makes me cry about u u are what makes me happy even when im feeling crappy i wanna be the one to complete ur life ill do anything to make u my wife when every thing is bad u make me the opposite of sad today i went crazy just cuz i luved u so much baby im gonna show u i luv u no bull**, ill put no one above u __________________

04-09-2006, 04:06 PM	#3 (permalink)
BAZ cash Join Date: Jun 2005 Posts: 108	yea i figured it sucked i been failing english since like 6th grade __________________

11-21-2006, 12:27 AM	#5 (permalink)
Epidemic BattleForums Junior Member Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Somewhere in CA Posts: 228	sounds like rnb =/ __________________ finally a forum worse than them all www.tomorrowafterthewar.freeforums.org where fat people are still cutting edge funny...

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04-09-2006, 04:00 PM	#2 (permalink)
~~Venice_native~~ BANNED Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: Auburn Posts: 2,014	Stop while you're behind. I can't even try to read it. Try to not make every word spelled wrong and make it flow grammatically, and then maybe.

04-09-2006, 04:14 PM	#4 (permalink)
~~Venice_native~~ BANNED Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: Auburn Posts: 2,014	It's not that it's bad, it's just grammatically and spelling wise it needs revision.

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