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You rate the story, not argue about a stupid copywrite ©2004. ******s..... I will now rate in my usual way.

The boss, now with a serious, No comma here and angered voice.

sloppish style sloppish? Do you mean sloppy

Very few errors or things that could be interpretated as a error, seems fine but let's see after I fully review it.

Spelling + Grammar: 9.7/10 Excellent, everything is in complete order. All the punctuation has been used correctly and in the right places. Not exactly the most interesting bit of the review but still an important part = /. Good wording for the most part, maybe I should + "wording to this bit"....

Originality: 5/10 This is not a really fair as I'm basing it on so little, if you update the story the mark will be changed. I saw a made up city, a person being followed then a fight scene breaks out, not very original so far . All stories have something completely un-original so I can't blame you for this bit.

Content: 6/10 I haven't seen too much so far, like before I can always change the mark. What time is it? I'm guessing medevil or something like that, the whole sword thing.

Vincent walked slowly amongst the dark streets of Midgar, with a forlorn expression.. The night was cold and lifeless, not too different from his true nature.

This is a very good example, description isn't sparse here , no shortage of cheesyness late on though = /. But I liked this particular part but try to make a map, descripe some landamarks he passed, a building, a fountain or anything like that. Were there any animals or people to be seen? You were far too eager to cut to the fight-scene.

metallic-claw

Put some more detail, a metallic claw isn't what you call "usual" build a image of it, more description needed.

“KILL HIM!”

A bit cheesy huh? Common, there must be a couple of million ways of saying "KILL HIM!" .

There were only two guys, each with enormous, bulky muscles. Vincent then realized there were others following him.

What were the others like? What clothes?

Vincent threw both of his fists backwards at them, landing one fist directly at their face. Vincent quickly followed this up by throwing his elbow’s into their guts, then took them out with a spinning-back kick, aimed

How can one first hit their face? Despite that, I still like this bit, the flow was good and it gave a more vivid description of his counter than "He hit them and they were thrashed omg". Overall I'd give this a 7, not a very long review = /, not a very long story either. You make it seem like this guy is invincible:

He made it obvious enough that he was planning to swing his sword vertically.

“Humph, who’s next?” Vincent said as he raised his metallic-claw at them.

Any "weakness's" (I'm taking it that you are planning to reveal it later, if not start planning too) yet? Hmmm which arm is the claw on? He can't use the sword in same hand as the claw, or can he? You just need some more detail and it'll be fine.

I'm shite at this = /