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**Chris** · 07-24-2003, 07:07 AM

Hellwolf gives you a 6/10, you have incomplete sentences (fragments) all over the story. Good because it is a historical fact, but you need to replace some periods with commas

07-24-2003, 07:07 AM	#5 (permalink)
Chris [F-Zero Fanatic] Join Date: May 2003 Location: Phantom Road Age: 22 Posts: 15,812	Hellwolf gives you a 6/10, you have incomplete sentences (fragments) all over the story. Good because it is a historical fact, but you need to replace some periods with commas