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bamthedoc · 07-05-2003, 06:16 PM

Story: 6/10
Originality: 7/10
Style: 5/10
Structure: 5/10
Spelling/Grammer: 4/10
Overall: 5.5

It seems your biggest problem remains building the story. You have a nack for telling one, but Style, Structure, and Spelling/Grammer work could help. Story suffered from driving force. It also had a good deal of originality to it. Just work on your weak areas and improve driving force, and you'll see that Overall soar.

07-05-2003, 06:16 PM	#2 (permalink)
bamthedoc King Endymion Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: North Carolina, USA Age: 25 Posts: 4,288	Story: 6/10 Originality: 7/10 Style: 5/10 Structure: 5/10 Spelling/Grammer: 4/10 Overall: 5.5 It seems your biggest problem remains building the story. You have a nack for telling one, but Style, Structure, and Spelling/Grammer work could help. Story suffered from driving force. It also had a good deal of originality to it. Just work on your weak areas and improve driving force, and you'll see that Overall soar. __________________ I am a force of good that none can oppose. BAM the DOC a.k.a. DragonAgnstEvil Role-Player's Realm ~ Literature Haven mumbles something about "puppy dog eyes" and "crying women" Currently = Wii pwns my soul ;_; Wii + Bonnie Lasses = Ultimate Combination!