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Old 06-10-2003, 01:55 AM   #4 (permalink)
Emperor Pan I
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Join Date: Aug 2002
Location: Canada
Age: 20
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Story 8/10
originality 7/10
style 6/10
structured 5/10
Spelling/Grammer 6/10
Overall 7.5

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Interesting story. The overall aspects are interesting, a bit confusing alot, especialy where all these poeple come from, but im sure you'll cover that. it is definately original, im not sure about having magic powers and such, but overall it is different. It is written pretty good, it is in good paragraphs, and the spelling and greammer is alright, ut i found several mistakes. I think u should use commas more often, to seperate ideas and such. Overall, i think it is good, and keep writting.
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