| At first glance, the poem seems like nonsense; thigs just seem thrown together randomly, with phrases like "to skin absorb through" and whatnot. However, the overall feel of the poem is interesting. It develops a strange rhythm that drives you through to the end. I like it... you've got a unique way with words. What about the last three lines, though? They don't seem to tie in right.
Fix the punctuation and it's a marvelous poem. Good job. |